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英語構文100 No1 it has been ~ since

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It has been over a week since I finished writing my paper. I want to try to submit it (A) my boss to get some suggestions (B) to make it (C) better. I have not discussed (D) well with her ever because I (E)become to feel (F)scary (G)during talking with her. I used to stop (H) discussion and go back (I) my room, even (J)as I didn't get some suggestions. I don't have any reason why I felt so. But something scary (K)thing was exactly there. However, today, I abandon my hope that I and she can talk with smiles. I decided to bare the situation (L)feared to me. I am going to fight with her.

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It has been over a week since I finished writing my paper. I want to try to submit it (A)to my boss to get some suggestions (B_)on how(_B) to make it (C)even better. I have not discussed (D)anything well with her ever because I (E)start to feel (F)scared (G)while talking with her. I used to stop (H)a discussion and go back (I)to my room, even (J)when I didn't get some suggestions. I don't have any reason why I felt so. But something scary (K) was exactly there. However, today, I abandon my hope that I and she can talk with smiles. I decided to bare the situation (L)scary to me. I am going to fight with her.

今後の課題,添削ダイジェスト

(A) Structure,
A preposition of direction is required; you submit something 'to' someone.

(B) Alternative,
This is correct and can slightly be improved when extended in such a way.

(C) Alternative,
This is just fine and you could optionally add such an adverb (it would imply the paper is already not too bad in its initial form).

(D) Structure,
That seems incomplete, and we would need some object for verb 'discuss'; you discuss something with someone.

(E) Structure,
You could say 'I come to feel', but 'becomes' doesn't fit in there.
Also, verb 'start' or 'begin' will work there.

(F) Term choice,
You are 'scared' because something is 'scary' and you experience/witness it.
If you are 'scary', it means someone else will fear you.

(G) Structure,
That preposition would work better with a regular noun, for example, 'during a talk with her'.
Otherwise, you a conjunction like I did (proper for a verb).

(H) Article,
You used countable/singular noun, 'discussion', to refer to one of more such events (between you and her), but not any specific one.
That indefinite article would work or possessive adjective 'our'.

(I) Structure,
A preposition of direction is required; you go (back) 'to' some place.

(J) Structure,
We should see the following as a possible condition/case of more existing (the other would be when you did get some suggestion). 'If' or 'when' will work there.

(K) Structure,
You already have a noun there, it's 'something'.
It can be either 'something scary' or 'scary thing'.

(L) Structure,
Some situation can be 'scary' to you (it makes you fear).

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