未添削英語構文100 No18 spend on~

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英語構文100　No18 spend on~

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添削後チェック入り：

Today, I (A)spend (B_)my all(_B) working time on a meeting. It was very long and I felt (C_)like sleeping(_C) sometimes. There were not only many (D)bored things I couldn't understand, but also something I (E)interested in. By the way, after I came back home, I barely became relaxed and had a thinking time. For example, I (F)already used all diary coupon tickets provided (G)fruitfulenglish (FE), (H)therefore I (I_)compared continuing to buy diary coupon tickets and changing to an e-mail plan(_I). Finally, I decided to buy diary coupon tickets. That (J)was (K)because I (L)submit today's diary to FE.

添削前：Today, I spend my all working time on a meeting. It was very long and I felt like sleeping sometimes. There were not only many bored things I couldn't understand, but also something I interested in.  By the way, after I came back home, I barely became relaxed and had a thinking time. For example, I already used all diary coupon tickets provided fruitfulenglish (FE), therefore I compared continuing to buy diary coupon tickets and changing to an e-mail plan. Finally, I decided to buy diary coupon tickets. That was because I submit today's diary to FE.

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答案作成にあたって調べたこと,添削後チェックしたいこと

• sometime,sometimes 使い分けを質問する

添削結果(添削依頼先：フルーツフルイングリッシュ日記添削)

Today, I (A)spent (B_)all my(_B) working time on a meeting. It was very long and I felt (C_)sleepy_C) sometimes. There were not only many (D)boring things I couldn't understand, but also something I (E)was interested in. By the way, after I came back home, I barely became relaxed and had a thinking time. For example, I (F)have already used all diary coupon tickets provided (G)by Fruitful English (FE), (H)so I (I_)wondered which I should do, continuing to buy diary coupon tickets or taking an e-mail plan instead(_I). Finally, I decided to buy diary coupon tickets. That (J)is (K)why I (L)am submitting today's diary to FE.

今後の課題,添削ダイジェスト

"sometimes"は「時々～する」の意味の頻度を表わす副詞ですから、今回の用法は問題ありませんでした。"sometime"は「いつかある時に」の意味の副詞で、未来のある時を表わします。また、今回は下記の箇所が気になりました。(I)「私は、このまま diary coupon tickets を買い続けるか、それともその代わりにan e-mail plan をとるかどちらにしたらよいか思案した。」の様に表現した方が分かりやすくなります。(J)(K)"That is because ~"は「それは～だからです」の様に理由を述べる表現ですから不自然です。ここは"That is why ~"を使って「それが理由で～、そういう訳で～」の様に、直前の理由を受けて、結果を述べる表現に変えた方がよいでしょう。それでは次回も期待しています。

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